" do kind of wish we'd gotten a little bit more of what it was like between Mel and Jared before Wanda though. he wasn't the most sympathetic of characters"
I totally agree.

The only thing that made me think of Twilight when reading this is that every now and then Jared or Ian's "voice" would remind me Edward.

I was hooked from the beginning but for some reason at the end I felt like something was missing. I could never quite put my finger on it. Maybe just that everyone ended up happily ever after.

I did think it was a brilliant story idea and well handled. Very interesting ideas.